Heres a poem i wrote last night may i hear your thoughtscomments on it?

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Heres a poem i wrote last night may i hear your thoughtscomments on it?
A Dream

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i wont comment any of the comments because i stopped reading after about th saying quotits okquot or something. i noticed that quot, , , quot formation and its not something that i come across very often. im going to take my current headache as an excuse to not understand the point in the poem but anyhow.. im not sure if you chose the best stanza formation with the considering the theme... this kind of formation makes it seem like the dream is leaving in inverted waves, or it can mean that every four lines a cycle occurs... like waking from a dream into another dream.brbri know i said i wouldnt comment comments but apparently i will there was one comment i forgot who said it, that made a point of the quotyouquot actually being quotiquot and i should agree, with it being applicable throughout the poem. weather this was intentional or not i cannot say, but in both cases it came out as a good thing. it creates an internal dialogue that can be interpreted as dream, memory, prayerinternal dialogue or a normal dialogue.brbrand id definetly keep the quotcryquot because hearing someone bleed is.... well, it sounds freaky.